Thinking Spot

[operadiva]

This is definitely something we can all relate to! But i really just wanted more of a personal experience. Because we all have our thinking place, I really wanted to know more about the specific thoughts you have while you are there. It's like show and tell. You showed us the spot, but didn't really tell us what happens. Maybe more time describing your thoughts as opposed to where you are thinking. You also got in a rut with word repetition. This is something I struggle with sometimes. I use the same word a lot. In this poem, the words 'numerous and moment' were just used too frequently. It would have been okay if there seemed to be a reason for the repetition, but in this case, it sounded more like words that weren't necessary. I love the concept, and generally enjoy the imagery you are going for, but I think some of it just seemed unsuccessful or excessive. Honesty is something I look for in poetry. I want your truth. 

Thank you for your time and energy.