09-09-2016, 08:43 PM
'Certainly enough times
to create a necklace large enough to supply
a tribe of cannibals.'
I like this wit, but three lines seems too many for the joke and the line breaks make it feel a bit labored
try to make it two lines, something like
'Certainly enough times to create a necklace,
to feed a tribe of cannibals.'
To me that would be more succinct and also hits harder.
to create a necklace large enough to supply
a tribe of cannibals.'
I like this wit, but three lines seems too many for the joke and the line breaks make it feel a bit labored
try to make it two lines, something like
'Certainly enough times to create a necklace,
to feed a tribe of cannibals.'
To me that would be more succinct and also hits harder.

