Middle Class [in Just-]
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(09-05-2016, 03:22 PM)Brownlie Wrote:  
(09-05-2016, 11:02 AM)just mercedes Wrote:  Your imagery is spot on, puts me right in the scene - the balloon man seems to take on and personify the ills of society, contorting to sell, sell, sell.

I don't know about the spaces and line breaks - my eyes don't read easily the way you broke up the white space of the page, but the hesitations and pauses are all part of the scene I guess, form and content blended.

Pessimism, from Black Friday to the used Fords, via Existential angst and akathisia (thanks for the new word!).
Appreciate you giving this a look. Tried to make a parody of e.e. Cummings' poem In Just-.
Doh! Sometimes I'm very obtuse. Well done! QED
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Messages In This Thread
Middle Class [in Just-] - by Brownlie - 09-05-2016, 07:26 AM
RE: Middle Class [in Just-] - by kolemath - 09-05-2016, 08:18 AM
RE: Middle Class [in Just-] - by Brownlie - 09-05-2016, 10:43 AM
RE: Middle Class [in Just-] - by just mercedes - 09-05-2016, 11:02 AM
RE: Middle Class [in Just-] - by Brownlie - 09-05-2016, 03:22 PM
RE: Middle Class [in Just-] - by just mercedes - 09-05-2016, 04:08 PM
RE: Middle Class [in Just-] - by CRNDLSM - 09-10-2016, 06:57 AM
RE: Middle Class [in Just-] - by Brownlie - 09-11-2016, 05:14 AM
RE: Middle Class [in Just-] - by Donald Q. - 09-10-2016, 11:48 PM



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