09-01-2016, 09:20 AM
I actually like many parts of it, but I don't like the first stanza, just feels out of place or not the right way to start this. The third stanza doesn't do much for me either. Some of the others are more catching. Some stanzas just seem to repeat the same thing in a different way...
I'm a rebel with a soft heart,
Teetering on the edge,
Dreaming is my lost art, but
I’m too indecisive to go to bed. { indecisive doesn't work for me here... why are you indecisive ...think I would prefer to know why....scared, sad, wired, excited, high.....
I'm a rebel with a soft heart,
Teetering on the edge,
Dreaming is my lost art, but
I’m too indecisive to go to bed. { indecisive doesn't work for me here... why are you indecisive ...think I would prefer to know why....scared, sad, wired, excited, high.....