Four Years Old

[Lizzie]

Hi Vanity! Thanks for the review. I thought I'd respond cause I'd like your thoughts on something.

Hi! I liked this very much. I especially liked the first 6 lines...I still see the purple glitter swirling (-:
(I think I had that same baton) -- Hooray! I LOVED my baton. I was convinced that I was a natural gift at it, even though I was pretty much just shaking it back and forth!
My only critique is...I'm not crazy about the last two lines. The 'leaves green only at the top' ..I see it, I'm  just not sure if I understand what you mean to say...I get that it feels sad. -- Yeah, it is sad. This line is the first one that came to me for the poem and everything else developed around it, so now I feel like I'm kind of married to it. However, I could possibly add a line before giving some more detail? The story is that my mom had severe depressive bouts and when my brother went away to school, he took companionship with him as mom didn't have much to give. The little bit that was still alive about her was buried deep within her cerebral cortex. So, that's what I'm trying to get across, that the only live bit about her was out of reach.
'Dishes in silence' does that for me too...but, I'm missing something in that last bit
But overall, liked this very much! I always enjoy reading your stuff -- thank you >< That felt amazing I love your work too -- I think we "get" each other.
...Great job