08-30-2016, 07:38 AM
(06-21-2016, 01:33 AM)dukealien Wrote: Reading this, couldn't help being reminded of the lady who was hired as the childrens' book editor for a major publishing house, then harshly criticized by her opposite number at another publisher because she had no education degree, teaching experience, or training in child psychology and child development. Her reply was, "Madam, I have been a child, and I remember everything!"
Hi! I liked this very much. I especially liked the first 6 lines...I still see the purple glitter swirling (-:
(I think I had that same baton)
My only critique is...I'm not crazy about the last two lines. The 'leaves green only at the top' ..I see it, I'm just not sure if I understand what you mean to say...I get that it feels sad. 'Dishes in silence' does that for me too...but, I'm missing something in that last bit
But overall, liked this very much! I always enjoy reading your stuff...Great job
"Why do you suppose we only feel compelled to chase the ones who run away?" -Vicomte de Valmont, Dangerous Liasons