Last Picture

[ellajam]

So vivid. I like the afterthought, the way we looking so closely for details we may have missed. Some notes below.

A photo of us taken on a Saturday morning
beside the raised bonnet of your red sports car.

That blue shop rag spilling out of your pocket, rusty wrench
clutched close to your chest, oil in the creases
I like the way blue kicks back to bonnet, and how the red/blue pop off the photo. I love wrench as a break here and for me crease works exceptionally well as enjambment.

of your pallid face like grey laced capillaries tracing your smile. Beautiful line.
Looming in the background I notice for the first time

veins and arteries of the Rowan tree against the sky
.....................................Berries bleed the horizon.
For me this was an effective use of white space, the line puts an emphatic period on the situation with a burst of emotion.

So, I like it as is, sorry about not having any suggestions but hopefully you can consider the comments if you decide to edit. Welcome to the Pen.