07-21-2016, 01:10 AM
Sweet and juicy. Title is weird, but the weirdness is sweet. And the poem would be even more juicy if the line breaks were more, say, regular, always ending with them more powerful nouns. Suggested:
There is an old man
in the moss-bound grove
who sits and cackles there.
He rattles his bones
then screams to the sun
and tugs his matted grey hair.
But on milk moon‘s night
when blue bugs hum, -- regardless of line change, really should be hum
he whispers quotes of Voltaire.
There is an old man
in the moss-bound grove
who sits and cackles there.
He rattles his bones
then screams to the sun
and tugs his matted grey hair.
But on milk moon‘s night
when blue bugs hum, -- regardless of line change, really should be hum
he whispers quotes of Voltaire.