Post Beat Modern (for milo)

[aschueler]

Thanks for all the feedback guys. Not to justify, but as an explanation of my motives. "grown" was meant as a pun.

RN - The  Stan Getz line merely sets the scene. He was one of the forerunners of "bossa nova" so it was a quickway to set the background. It wasn't suppose to be a comment on who is the best sax player, although he did have tremendous breath control, but one would nearly have to be a woodwind player to appreciate the full extent of it.  

LunaDeLore - " she's grown balls", i.e., " she has grown balls" signifies a passage of time, or that was my intent. It was not my intent that she grew balls just at that moment. Maybe there is a better way to state that. I would be happy to hear a suggestion on that. Obviously the way it is now leads to some ambiguity. Maybe I should just write it with the "has" included, although that's a trade off with the cadence. Maybe:

"She has grown balls over their time together"?   Nah, to explanatory.

No suggestions here. Any help would be appreciated.

Thanks for giving it a read Billy,

dale

Sadly I have been working too many hours to comment as much lately.  

But I didn't like the "...grown balls..." line, it seems cliched and crude, and as you said any help...I would suggest "grown on since him" Or better "grown on since"