3rd Annual Poems About Suicide Month

[Lizzie]

Self critique

I started by cutting a few words,
not too much mostly cliche
but it made them worse
so I started doing lines
that seemed to work fine
appart from habitual forced rhyme.

My titles never seem to work
and I think all my poems
should end before the last verse
as most of the good stuff
is in the ones I wrote first.

They'll say he just stopped writing
but there's no poetry in that?
and although the petrol smell
is frightening and the tiptoed
noose is tightening.
It just comes down to the ending
and a slow mo match descending.

That last paragraph is just, well, poetry You're one of my favorite authors on this site. Great read!

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Can we still contribute to this thread even though the month has ended?