Winds of Anger

[rowens]

The last three lines of the poem take it in another direction, if you could somehow manage that in other parts of the poem: Instead you state ordinary things then end with the premise of the poem. In some cases that would work, the last three lines would hold the poem up, but here it doesn't come off so strong. Debates over logic and common sense make little difference. The threadbare, perfectly common sense description in your poem, leading up to the last three lines, is what leaves it generic. The description isn't bad, only nothing stands out and grips attention. It's a poem after all.