Four Years Old
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I love the journey this poem gives the reader and how every image captures the isolation of the speaker. I was a bit confused by 'weightless,' as the words doesn't seem to connect to the poem's theme, as i read it. perhaps work on how the sensation of weightlessness connects to being ignored all day? that or pick a different descriptor for the glitter image?

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Four Years Old - by Lizzie - 06-20-2016, 04:23 PM
RE: Four Years Old -- any level of critique welcome! - by kolemath - 06-21-2016, 01:39 PM
RE: Four Years Old -- any level of critique welcome! - by just mercedes - 07-08-2016, 10:48 AM
RE: Four Years Old - by Lizzie - 03-25-2017, 06:41 AM
RE: Four Years Old - by CarrieChristo - 03-31-2017, 01:21 PM
RE: Four Years Old - by Lizzie - 04-03-2017, 05:46 AM
RE: Four Years Old - by Todd - 03-31-2017, 02:37 PM
RE: Four Years Old - by Lizzie - 04-03-2017, 07:09 AM
RE: Four Years Old - by CRNDLSM - 04-03-2017, 02:20 AM
RE: Four Years Old - by QDeathstar - 04-03-2017, 06:06 AM



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