06-16-2016, 06:51 AM
RN, I can't offer much crit at this stage 'cept to say that this is bloody brilliant. I picture the two narrators lying next to each other thinking, at night.
You may have had A Game of Chess in mind, the latter half of that pome with the disjointed voices. Or at least I did, while reading.
On a different note, I haven't seen the film, but now I want to.
'Like a stub of tallow'
'Eventually of Aeneas'
'Great barge of decay'
So many sparkling lines.
Nit: tallow? That went out of use 100 years ago, I'd think?
You may have had A Game of Chess in mind, the latter half of that pome with the disjointed voices. Or at least I did, while reading.
On a different note, I haven't seen the film, but now I want to.
'Like a stub of tallow'
'Eventually of Aeneas'
'Great barge of decay'
So many sparkling lines.
Nit: tallow? That went out of use 100 years ago, I'd think?
~ I think I just quoted myself - Achebe