06-15-2016, 12:25 PM
(06-15-2016, 12:13 AM)Quixilated Wrote: Hi 71,
I don't have much to say, but thought this was lovely.
The first stanza was mildly confusing for me. I don't know what "word" the narrator is searching for, a word of love? A pre-breakup apology? A post-breakup apology? There is an implied time limit on the romance with the double mention of "summer" ... is the word "stay?" Is it "goodbye?" Since the narrator doesn't know the word, we probably aren't meant to know either, but it didn't stop me from trying to solve the riddle, which was distracting from the rest of the poem.
The rest, however was lovely and evocative. I thought the last stanza was was beautiful and could stand alone.
--Quix
Glad you liked this. Your words are encouraging. FYI: more like "for" love, rather than "of" love. Something like that.