For the Heights (Edit 2)

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I have some trouble understanding this poem so it might be that none of my comments are of any help.
I will try my best though.

Mist, burning sulfur men    Sulfur men are workers going for sulfur in volcanoes? The mist clouds the vision making them fall? Or are the men there for the mist?
falling into the volcanoe's pit
for mist, a bit of shade,   Do the men go there for shade? Should I read "for" as "because of"?
the peak confuses heights   How does the peak confuse heights?
like crowns do kings.   I like this line, I just don't see the connection with the previous one.

Lava melts every touch
nothing but lava now
burning sulfur men melting  
into one for the mist.  this stanza trips me up when I read it, maybe punctuation would help it.

It might be that I just don't know what sulfur men does so I don't understand it. My knowledge is based on one documentary, so this might be my problem. I think you could try to make it a bit clearer though.

I look forward to see where this is going, thank you for sharing the poem!

Joseph,
thanks for your comments, theyre very helpful. I will work on making this less ambiguous, and will work on the second stanzas flow as well,
mike

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I like,

"the peak confuses heights
like crowns do kings."

but other than that I really have no idea what this pom is trying to do (actually I don't know what that is trying to do, but it's a fun simile), so I really can't offer any critique.

Best,

dale

dale,
thanks for the note, this line makes perfect sense, but only in my head hehe. ill work on this one some more, thanks,
mike