05-28-2016, 10:00 AM
First stanza holds the strongest and weakest points for me.
Weak: I don't understand how nightfall might tickle one's toes even when personified - kissing of the face is a more appropriate image, in my opinon.
Strong: The metaphorical input in the last two lines of the first stanza are pretty sweet - "Kept at bay til dusk walks by, and Mother holds tight to the sky".
Weak: I don't understand how nightfall might tickle one's toes even when personified - kissing of the face is a more appropriate image, in my opinon.
Strong: The metaphorical input in the last two lines of the first stanza are pretty sweet - "Kept at bay til dusk walks by, and Mother holds tight to the sky".