Dark Personified

[Magpie]

Hi Sean, my first thought about this poem would be the title, it could give the impression of a more sinister poem than what you have here, so perhaps something like 'The Night Personified'... I would even consider dropping 'personified'.

The gentle touch, the soft embrace
That tickles my toes and kisses my face
‘Til morning breaks, and away it’s chased.
Kept at bay ‘til dusk walks by,
And Mother holds tight to the sky.

Then, slowly walking through the street
Recovers from its last retreat
Draped gently like an endless sheet. -- consider what 'an endless sheet' would be 'a sheet' would work or 'a silk sheet' etc.
Covering windows, closing doors,
Only to recede once more.

Peacefully timid, eagerly shy -- these almost seem like oxymorons, is that intentional? Peaceful and timid, eager and shy?
Patiently waiting to explore.

Just a couple of thoughts for possible consideration,

Thanks for the read,

Mark