The Sentinel

[Caleb Murdock]

Thank you so much! Those small fixes will be easy. Rewriting the poem without the anthropomorphizing wouldn't have been easy. I'm glad that it doesn't appear archaic.

Thank you for the spelling correction. At first I had "draught", and then I had "drought", and then I settled on "drout". I don't know why I didn't look in the dictionary.

The difference in these lines is very interesting:

This was not some planted sapling left to die,
As they often do, by indifferent bureaucrats;

This was not some planted sapling left to die,
As they often are, by indifferent bureaucrats;

If I leave it as "do", the "do" refers to "die"; if I change it to "are", the "are" refers to "left". "Are" is probably better.

Thanks again! You've eased my mind regarding the main concern I had about the poem.