05-16-2016, 02:19 AM
Leanne, I'm a big fan of the new second to last line, it makes it much more powerful. I like both ricochet lines. The old one sounded nicer but I like the meaning of the new one better.
Caleb, I read it as a marriage gone sour and in my mind "she" is a preteen girl still young enough to want to please and obey, but as things get dragged out and uglier between her parents she begins to emotionally distance herself. I extrapolate to imagine her getting involved in hard drugs etc, ending up totally numb and depressed, thus the bones vs a life. I like your miscarriage idea too. That's what I find so beautiful about poetry done well-- every reader brings his/her own experience to the poem and can see what makes most sense to them.
-jc
Caleb, I read it as a marriage gone sour and in my mind "she" is a preteen girl still young enough to want to please and obey, but as things get dragged out and uglier between her parents she begins to emotionally distance herself. I extrapolate to imagine her getting involved in hard drugs etc, ending up totally numb and depressed, thus the bones vs a life. I like your miscarriage idea too. That's what I find so beautiful about poetry done well-- every reader brings his/her own experience to the poem and can see what makes most sense to them.
-jc
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The howling beast is back.
The howling beast is back.