this a workshop. if we make blanket statements like the ones below we help no one. give reasons. 2nd, this is the novice forum and while we always ask for honesty we do hope some kindness or thoughtfulness in replies./mod
(04-30-2016, 06:07 AM)humility Wrote: The first paragraph made me think of either an illness or murderous/suicidal intent. As what else could seeds of death grow into? The second paragraph seemed like gibberish to me. Third paragraph less gibberishy I guess, people mocking someone? Well with the 'seeds of death' from the first paragraph, the fourth paragraph makes me think of someone being tempted to head out and kill everyone mocking/doing mean things to the narrator. The earworm quality wasn't that bad I guess. But the subject matter to me felt like something the generic emo kid in a By the numbers TV series would write.