05-12-2016, 03:42 AM
I wanted to note, with apologies for the lack of analysis, that if the context is the Pride movement, the concepts of wind and color may reference the rainbow flag. The concept of purity may be to the Christian notions of celibacy and "traditional" marriage. From there, it's easy to extrapolate to human rights concerns more broadly. Glass, then, is the glass ceiling and all such peculiar constraints on equal treatment. If that's the lens, then fear and love equate intuitively. It'd be the majority fear of the other versus the individual love within a relationship. Again, apologies for commenting on a comment. It's poor form, but I hope not terribly so.
I should say, too, that the description of nature as fearsome is a neat turn, and makes me think an Italian sonnet might be an appropriate means of expressing the idea. In that medium, fear would be fear of the other in the octet and would turn to fear of punishing natural preferences in the sextet. The notion would be that the majority fear of difference is outmatched by the individual's power, when that power is funded by love. The notion of purity would be better realized, too, because purity would turn with fear, from the octet to the sextet. The majority view is that purity is found in self-negating celibacy and tradition, and that view fails when pitted against the individual's pure desire for self-expression via love in a relationship.
Lastly, the typos are inexcusable, especially when they're as minor as spacing errors. Please correct them ASAP, as they decimate your credibility, a dear possession in a poem that's easily seen as errant human philosophy made into poetry only by the device of line breaks. Any errors invite the reader to dismiss the work as masturbatory nonsense. Along those lines, consider platters, platens or pans as a proper sub for "plates."
I should say, too, that the description of nature as fearsome is a neat turn, and makes me think an Italian sonnet might be an appropriate means of expressing the idea. In that medium, fear would be fear of the other in the octet and would turn to fear of punishing natural preferences in the sextet. The notion would be that the majority fear of difference is outmatched by the individual's power, when that power is funded by love. The notion of purity would be better realized, too, because purity would turn with fear, from the octet to the sextet. The majority view is that purity is found in self-negating celibacy and tradition, and that view fails when pitted against the individual's pure desire for self-expression via love in a relationship.
Lastly, the typos are inexcusable, especially when they're as minor as spacing errors. Please correct them ASAP, as they decimate your credibility, a dear possession in a poem that's easily seen as errant human philosophy made into poetry only by the device of line breaks. Any errors invite the reader to dismiss the work as masturbatory nonsense. Along those lines, consider platters, platens or pans as a proper sub for "plates."
A yak is normal.