The Red Valley

[Achebe]

Thank you Leanne, I am working on the problems but still needed some help, that is why I post it here to hear the opinion from more experienced writers. The first stanza I hoped would be a shorter one and not really tire the reader, but the rest were longer so they do just that, make them concentrate more and even exhaust a bit (they are still too short to do something like that but I liked the idea). To be honest, the only excuse I have for using tetrameter is that it is just a habit. Now about rump and stomp and I'm sure many other words in my poems, I can try to blame the fact that English is actually not my native language and I really don't know the position that each of the words hold within the language. All I know from English is from films, TV shows and of course books. I'm still learning it and I am getting better so hopefully soon I will not have such small mistakes. Thank you for your help.

Trying to learn a language better by writing in it is a pretty cool idea. I tried the same with Spanish, but it was nowhere near as good as your English, so I couldn't put my plan into practice. It might help, however, if you start with short poems rather than a medieval cycle.