04-24-2016, 06:01 AM
(04-23-2016, 07:00 AM)Achebe Wrote: Mountain tops touching forever is a strange image. What are they touching, if not poetically the sky? And why would your mysterious person not know that?Achebe,
I get it that said person doesn't know that you think of him.bit that's not being communicated at the end.
Two people, possibly soul mates, that haven't met or who don't know one another; this is what I was trying to express from a single point of view. The mystery person doesn't know who the writer is; doesn't know the writer thinks about him, or does he? Maybe they both do the same thing and wonder. I dunno. Maybe the ending could use a little work. Thanks for pointing that out and thanks for reading and commenting.
Luna
In your own, each bone comes alive
the skeleton jangles in its perfunctory sleeve....
(Chris Martin)
the skeleton jangles in its perfunctory sleeve....
(Chris Martin)