Inheritance

[danielcarter]

So this is my first comment, and I hope that it is helpful. I would have to echo the punctuation issues. I will say that I have fallen prey to this, and other poets that I know, also struggle with this at times. So you are not alone in that area. I am curious about the inspiration of this piece. I was a bit lost in the tropes (Figurative Language). Tropes are a good vehicle, but you just want to provide more clues, as to what they are alluding. Continue to work with it. The elements are good, they just need some more coherence.