03-28-2016, 11:19 PM
Good poem. However, I have a little bit of opinion regarding these two lines:
Grudges, weighed into my throat
like a book, heavy and five hundred pages long
I assume that you are trying to describe the grudge of losing her. However, the five hundred page book is not that thick and heavy you know....
Grudges, weighed into my throat
like a book, heavy and five hundred pages long
I assume that you are trying to describe the grudge of losing her. However, the five hundred page book is not that thick and heavy you know....