the end of an old life
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Good poem. However, I have a little bit of opinion regarding these two lines:

Grudges, weighed into my throat

like a book, heavy and five hundred pages long

I assume that you are trying to describe the grudge of losing her. However, the five hundred page book is not that thick and heavy you know....
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the end of an old life - by faerykid - 03-10-2016, 02:45 PM
RE: the end of an old life - by ephemerald - 03-10-2016, 06:09 PM
RE: the end of an old life - by tectak - 03-11-2016, 04:21 PM
RE: the end of an old life - by Achebe - 03-12-2016, 03:52 PM
RE: the end of an old life - by Mr.Malicious - 03-27-2016, 01:57 PM
RE: the end of an old life - by 1skylande1 - 03-28-2016, 11:19 PM
RE: the end of an old life - by jmmc137 - 03-30-2016, 12:13 PM



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