03-16-2016, 06:56 PM
Hi,
I enjoyed this poem very much. It is simple and to the point and put me in mind of Mary Elizabeth Frye's "Do not stand at my grave...)
The imagery you have used works very well for me, though the word 'blanket' in the first line doesn't flow as well as perhaps 'fall on' would - just my opinion :-) My favourite lines are There is no restlessness in death,
no memories of life held dear.
and
Time for me is now the same
as the time before my birth.
These lines are very comforting, well thought out and executed.
I enjoyed this poem very much. It is simple and to the point and put me in mind of Mary Elizabeth Frye's "Do not stand at my grave...)
The imagery you have used works very well for me, though the word 'blanket' in the first line doesn't flow as well as perhaps 'fall on' would - just my opinion :-) My favourite lines are There is no restlessness in death,
no memories of life held dear.
and
Time for me is now the same
as the time before my birth.
These lines are very comforting, well thought out and executed.