03-15-2016, 05:38 AM
Nice one, Julius. Liked the last stanza.
The 'but' in L5 seems to be one syllable too many? Doesn't sound right in my ear.
EDIT - the stressed / unstressed count depends on whether you start L5 with 'cry' or 'CRY' - I was doing the latter, and the 'but' was over the number. If you start with an unstressed 'cry' then the 'but' is OK.
The 'but' in L5 seems to be one syllable too many? Doesn't sound right in my ear.
EDIT - the stressed / unstressed count depends on whether you start L5 with 'cry' or 'CRY' - I was doing the latter, and the 'but' was over the number. If you start with an unstressed 'cry' then the 'but' is OK.
~ I think I just quoted myself - Achebe