The Rain

[Bucca]

I like the theme of the poem and think you are onto a good start. But I feel like everything is stuffed in at once without creating richness to the poem. There's too much cliche without a solid imagery. I think simplifying it a bit would help. The rain triggered chaos in the world, and that can be clearly seen in your poem, but it's hard to relate to. There's too many things going on at once.

But still it's a good base to work on and play around with!