A Cure for a Stammer edit 0.1keith,tiger

[tectak]

How do you come up with these ideas, I found the stammers rather frustrating to read but it does work within the lines I'm just not sure of the poems basis. I don't want to sound foolish or a smart arse but here goes. If this is a recollection then why is the N stammering especially in S1 and S2, surley it should start in S3 when the reader is place at the scene of the crimes against the N as such as it is.  I must say the meter is spot on and its really not easy to tell a story so well as this. I have put some other comments for your consideration.
Best Keith

I thuh-thuh thought that I would sleep, but no.
I muh-muh must have been awake all night.
I'm sure I'm happy  nuh-nuh now but know
that wuh-wuh what I done just wasn't right. I'm hooked I want to know what he did.

I nuh-nuh know what people think of me.
For fuh-fuck's sake try walkin' in my shoes.
I hated kids way buh-buh back but we The phrasing here feels off as though it is structured to catch the ryhme
were all kids then,  though that ain't no excuse.

The guh-guh girls, I saw them look  away:
and  from  behind their ears went up, a sign This is a nice observation I like the detail
that they were pullin' faces so I'd say
fuh-fuh fuck you bitch, and  lose face every time. Girls to bitches ?

Except just once, her name was Clementine. Like how you catch the rhyme from S3
She had a kinda tick that made her twitch.
The other girls would ask  her for the time
then luh-luh laugh n' call her Wind-up Witch.

We tuh-tuh talked most evenin's walkin' back.
She tuh-tuh twitched, I stammered, but  we grinned.
The other kids would gather like a pack
and chant our names like we had somehow sinned. You got me, happy the N has found a soul mate

One day I kissed her rough on thuh-the mouth.
I guess I thought I loved her...but she cried.
She ruh-ruh ran away back to her house
and told her puh-puh pah.Shit, how she lied. This cuts deep given th N plight

And thuh-thuh that was when I up't an' went;
I luh-luh left a note for Wind-Up Witch.
The cops let loose the dogs, they got my scent,
and fuh-fuh found me hidin' in a ditch.

I never got the chance to tell my side.
I tried buh-but the words just wouldn't come.
The judge, she said that all along I'd lied;
that I'd turn out to be a no good bum. I like how the story is unraveling

She told me just one chance was all I'd get;
three months  in cuh-correction was my due.
Inside, I got the dirt from guys I met;
when I got out...I knew what I must do.

So here I stand with smokin' gun in hand.
They laughed at me but they're not laughing now.
I guess that now, at last, they understand.
My stammer's gone.Listen...listen...wow! Neat ending in a weird psycho kind of way
1tectak2016

Glad you took the trip,keith. I knew that there would be an irritation factor in the stammering BUT morally we feel obliged and good about ourselves for listening to stammerers desperately trying to get their words out. It is an understanding of the condition which permits this tolerance...kids don't get it, it takes time.
Though this is not based on any specific incident I could readily believe it has happened many times.
Some say stick it in the fun forum...fine by me. I don't stammer but don't think it's that funny
Best,
tectak