02-17-2016, 01:33 AM
(02-06-2016, 02:34 AM)Julius Wrote: First nappyReally cleverly written, especially funny when read out loud, and it does work mostly! Though for example stanza three, line three, the 'i'd swear for fun' fels a little forced, and doesn't perfectly work like most of your other lines. However, overall this is brilliant!
I remember that first nappy,
best described as wet and crappy;
‘though it stank it made us happy.
It proved all systems worked.
I’m afraid we made a mess,
even got some on my chest
but all in all we did our best.
Our duty never shirked.
Prepared to wrap one round her bum,
we laid her on a clean dry one.
But then she pee'd, I'd swear for fun.
But we didn't mind.
It very soon became routine;
washed and dried, a little cream
applied to her our little dream.
It never was a bind.
