Will and Testament

[ellajam]

Not sure what to do with this. It came out raw.

Will and Testament
 
Dad never wanted
to be cremated.
Just don’t burn me, he’d say. I don't mind the italics
The facts were he was dead I would put "the fact was", just my opinion
and never planned anything.
 
My ex wants to be put in a wall.
I don’t know the details
but I’m sure my daughter is good for it. please, please, please don't change this last line, especially "is good for it". When I read it, it delivered with such a good sense of wit to it, if you get what I mean. I suppose it's the informality-- I really liked it.
 
Me?
I think I’d like to be a tree. Didn't catch the rhyme when I read. I don't mind it, and if you went with "myself" and don't think it would move as nicely with the new syllable.
 
But I was thinking of you, Leslie, Lost here but honestly, I'm totally fine with it. The story is personal and I get a lot of feeling from it. That's all that matters to me when it comes to a piece like this
while driving past Lake Gibson 
this frozen Sunday
after a night of contrived forgetting;
I was thinking of you.
 
No one asks to have their limbs encased
in a concrete block
and  their torso
encased in another.
No one plans for that. I might omit this last line.
 
Their are days when we die *there*, no biggie. I didn't find this too "preachy" but would be interested to see what the rewrite looks like.
by varying degrees
and that day was one.

None of us knows what to do next.

I haven't commented on anything in the Pen in forever. This one caught my eye, and thanks for that. Sometimes the stuff that comes out raw and unfiltered is the best. A lot of the time, actually. Most of the time. All the time. This was really good, is what I'm saying.

Thanks again,
Cousin

Great to see you posting. It's so important to pop in when you want to tell the OP whoa, don't mess with that.

I think you may have changed my mind on "good for it", it stopped me a bit but it does have a fresh tone to it, maybe it was good to stop, good call.