01-30-2016, 02:33 AM
Thanks RN,
A very concise and helpful critique, I don't think I have any disagreements except maybe the philosophical ones and as this is advice about who not to waste ones time on... (If it makes you feel any better, I doubt my daughters would agree with the advice in this poem either). You have touched on many points that have vexed me and given me an answer for the last line "on those| who want| wisdom| only| to rent." At least I think that might work, need to check I don't have some trochee in there. Unless I work with it a lot, my ear becomes more and more inaccurate. All in all, at the moment it just makes my brain hurt
It probably needs to come out. (Do I need to note that came from a Monte Python skit, we just recently had a horrendous and somewhat ridiculous debate about the difference between allusion and plagiarism)
Thanks again,
dale
A very concise and helpful critique, I don't think I have any disagreements except maybe the philosophical ones and as this is advice about who not to waste ones time on... (If it makes you feel any better, I doubt my daughters would agree with the advice in this poem either). You have touched on many points that have vexed me and given me an answer for the last line "on those| who want| wisdom| only| to rent." At least I think that might work, need to check I don't have some trochee in there. Unless I work with it a lot, my ear becomes more and more inaccurate. All in all, at the moment it just makes my brain hurt
It probably needs to come out. (Do I need to note that came from a Monte Python skit, we just recently had a horrendous and somewhat ridiculous debate about the difference between allusion and plagiarism)Thanks again,
dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.