Contend You Not

[Erthona]

Ah good to have you back. Not sure why I re-posted this thing (evidently I should revisited those other comments although I did try and make changes with this one, for some reason it resists me). You are right it has been here before and it is still no better. I think you wrong me. The "it" in the first four lines refers to the " untrained mind", that you missed that concerns me. The rest of the crit I will take on as  a whole, thanks for the comma placement. It is true it may come across as elitist, but it is more a warning for my daughters about what sorts of people not to struggle against. Being the type to write a sonnet about once every three years it is difficult to see where I am screwing up in terms of the particulars of form. Being dyslexic it is difficult to see where I am inserting inversions. Sonnets have never felt natural to me, I suppose just to much Germanic syntax in my bones. Trochee always seems to work better for me and I notice that you often switch between the two yourself, so maybe I'm not the only one.

Anyway, I am just glad you are doing well and will soon return to the fold, I have missed you Will look forward to a description of your new abode. Are you still in country or did you flee to  the land of Jupiter? I would move to the island despite Etna in a minute, after all it is at least half of my homeland, the other being the Florida swamps. Which would you choose?  



dale

PS Almost forgot    [ee-zuh-lee]   definition of easily

rule of three applies to the second unaccented syllable according to milo when writing IP.