01-26-2016, 06:18 AM
Not sure the title really fits the poem. If the poem were characterized as a psychotic love poem, then the title would be a "borderline" title. So they are a bit at odds. Of course the speaker seems to try to make the reality larger than it really is (unless there really is a psychotic break occurring), but overall it is indicative of some sort of grief (as a further line confirms) in someone who is still young enough not understand the process and so pushes away comfort while at the same time holding on to it.
If that is what is going on, this seems a very clear rendition of that sort of situation. So the clarity of the vision is good. However that is all that it is. It really doesn't go beyond this superficial rendition, or exhibit any deep awareness or insight into the event, that is to say there is but one layer of the poem no matter how energetic it is.
Certainly there are many positives to take away from this piece and there is more than a hint of some talent here.
Best,
dale
If that is what is going on, this seems a very clear rendition of that sort of situation. So the clarity of the vision is good. However that is all that it is. It really doesn't go beyond this superficial rendition, or exhibit any deep awareness or insight into the event, that is to say there is but one layer of the poem no matter how energetic it is.
Certainly there are many positives to take away from this piece and there is more than a hint of some talent here.
Best,
dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.