01-23-2016, 05:51 AM
I'm wondering about buzzing electric light. Although it can happen, perhaps it would be better to think of something more related to light. “harsh glow”, “soft glow” - something that relates to light but sets the mood. This is really only a minor point.
The second stanza has an air of something lost and, in fact, I sense a strong feeling over the last line. To me it means when life was carefree and happiness came easily, and was the main thing shared.
The second stanza has an air of something lost and, in fact, I sense a strong feeling over the last line. To me it means when life was carefree and happiness came easily, and was the main thing shared.