01-14-2016, 01:05 PM
mlund,
Welcome to the site,
This seems more a run-on sentence than a poem. The phrasing seems generally awkward and the conclusion makes little sense.
" that I have to remove myself to solitude" One can remove oneself from something, but not to something.
Experiments in sensory deprivation tanks proved that isolation magnifies the mental processes, not lessens it. A fact known by Native Americans and other aboriginal tribes for millennium, when they go on the Americanized "Vision Quest". Were it an Anxiety of a specific nature such as being afraid of dogs, then yes, removing oneself from the stimuli would help, but as loneliness, regardless of it cause is within the individual, isolating oneself would not seem a viable answer. As it has been said, "Everywhere you go, there you are!".
Best,
dale
Welcome to the site,
This seems more a run-on sentence than a poem. The phrasing seems generally awkward and the conclusion makes little sense.
" that I have to remove myself to solitude" One can remove oneself from something, but not to something.
Experiments in sensory deprivation tanks proved that isolation magnifies the mental processes, not lessens it. A fact known by Native Americans and other aboriginal tribes for millennium, when they go on the Americanized "Vision Quest". Were it an Anxiety of a specific nature such as being afraid of dogs, then yes, removing oneself from the stimuli would help, but as loneliness, regardless of it cause is within the individual, isolating oneself would not seem a viable answer. As it has been said, "Everywhere you go, there you are!".
Best,
dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.