12-18-2015, 12:35 PM
Ah, you got to your confession before I could chastise you. Being the good poet that you are, some good phrases were bound to come about, however before reading your confession I had already decided that this poem had 8 mothers with 100 husbands each wandering in the desert of Moe's Ass. Of the first part of the poem, that is all that has nothing to do with the ad hoc "Death of Faith", you seem to know your subject poorly and it shows, however it is held up by flourish. I can almost see the fairy dust spraying from your fingertips. It makes no sense, but does give one that bubbly feeling that occurs when reading a poem like "Jabberwocky".
Sorry it took so long to get to this, looks like everyone else has covered all the ground. In the end I think it could have been an interesting poem had your hard on for religion not gotten in the way, well that and having an idea of where you were trying to go with this. Oh well, nothing ventured no broken knee caps
dale
Sorry it took so long to get to this, looks like everyone else has covered all the ground. In the end I think it could have been an interesting poem had your hard on for religion not gotten in the way, well that and having an idea of where you were trying to go with this. Oh well, nothing ventured no broken knee caps
dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.