12-14-2015, 03:43 PM
the opening line provided a lovely feel for the poem. first read, i wasn't fond of line 12, although "where sentiment makes simple acts
a rite of divine trespass..." really captured me and brought back the initial beauty of the poem, despite my feeling it got a little lost. felt a sort of breathlessness throughout, a beautiful passion. the title could better reflect this.
a rite of divine trespass..." really captured me and brought back the initial beauty of the poem, despite my feeling it got a little lost. felt a sort of breathlessness throughout, a beautiful passion. the title could better reflect this.