A slanted view
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(12-11-2015, 12:01 PM)billy Wrote:  the form in you is strong young wonkywalker
the couplet works though if you want a suggestion, it would be to

alter [still wants to hang around] it feels a little out of kilter with the language at use in the sonnet.
Um teach me you will
made edits I have

If your undies fer you've been smoking through em, don't peg em out
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A slanted view - by Keith - 12-09-2015, 03:57 AM
RE: A slanted view - by rayheinrich - 12-09-2015, 11:54 AM
RE: A slanted view - by Keith - 12-10-2015, 07:51 PM
RE: A slanted view - by billy - 12-09-2015, 05:22 PM
RE: A slanted view - by billy - 12-11-2015, 12:01 PM
RE: A slanted view - by Keith - 12-12-2015, 04:59 AM



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