A recipe for soothing white noise

[Alexearth]

i like it but i can't say why. i think a semi colon may have separated the two statements better. i think the last line excellent, at first i thought universe would work better than sky but on second thought i prefer sky and also like the image it gives the white noise. i'd also like to see the ship connection more at work in the 2nd part; as it is it reads as an excerpt from a larger piece.

Hey Billy! Thanks for your comment.
For the last line, I was wondering instead if "I imitate the comforting noise of the sky" wasn't better, or "the comforting voice of the sky"? what d'you think?

Your last thought is interesting. I like the idea of giving the text the impression of an excerpt from a larger piece, it's like a small window on a larger idea and makes you wonder, in my opinion.

Thanks again!

Alex