Nightmare

[just mercedes]

one of my first poems, not to sure how good it actually is, but im looking forward to any critique.

Nightmare
Tonight i'll lie awake in bed,
a pillow underneath my head. 
Your body underneath my arm, 
to keep you safe from all harm. 
Your feet are cold, your eyes are closed,
as you sleep you still look posed.
Through cotton candy clouds you fly,
in dreams you have, while i just lie,
beside you in my double bed. 
I ponder if i'm in your head.
you drift away, i think of you,
under sheets the colour blue.
I finally decide to rest,
but dreams i've never had the best.
I awaken, you're not there,
for every dream there's a nightmare.

Hi - I  like the way you turned the poem on its head at the end. Your rhymes are pedestrian at best - you could work on providing more surprises with word choice. Your meter breaks down here and there, worse in the final line, which should be a strong line. Only four words have more than two syllables, and they have only three. I think you could mix that up a bit more. Try making the passive more active - instead of 'your feet are cold', make the feet do something.