A walk among the tombstones

[elviaje26]

A walk among the tombstones

A walk among the tombstones,
I look upon a star.
The night of moon is on us,
you wander off too far.
Your breathing starts to quicken,
my heart begins to race.
The trees once sparse now thicken
I long for your embrace.
The clouds, they start to cover,
the moonlight we once shared.
From sight, I now have lost you,
that thought renders me scared.
A love I thought was rising,
like the moon, that glowing ball.
The star I once was eyeing,
now begins to fall.

Just my honest commentary here. I feel like this poem has cliche everywhere in this poem and not much was new or something indivdualized to the author. The ryhme scheme is a bit simple and throughs me off a bit. The poem has excellent flow and rhyme. I think it would help if you wrote more about the fear in the graveyard and the reason you were there.

-Clay