11-20-2015, 10:19 PM
Thanks Billy. Thanks ronsaik.
I fully agree with the issues present in this poem, and I was very tempted to change some of the words, but I stuck to my guns and used precisely the words that appear in that "other poem", which I will continue to search for.
The "word list" poem is a cruel task master, yet I highly recommend it, as it forces one's mind to make sense of a finite set of words.
I am not even sure how I would re-do this one now that I've let it go. Nor am I sure that I could affect the tone it conveys: though it admittedly tends toward obscurity.
Of course, there will be no explaining of the content by me, as the "meaning" now exists in your heads (or not).
All that said, I much appreciate the spot-on analysis given by both of you.
Thanks again,
... Mark
I fully agree with the issues present in this poem, and I was very tempted to change some of the words, but I stuck to my guns and used precisely the words that appear in that "other poem", which I will continue to search for.
The "word list" poem is a cruel task master, yet I highly recommend it, as it forces one's mind to make sense of a finite set of words.
I am not even sure how I would re-do this one now that I've let it go. Nor am I sure that I could affect the tone it conveys: though it admittedly tends toward obscurity.
Of course, there will be no explaining of the content by me, as the "meaning" now exists in your heads (or not).
All that said, I much appreciate the spot-on analysis given by both of you.
Thanks again,
... Mark