a night and a day

[aleexgold]

I found this poem very interesting seeing as it has a good flow and is reasonably easy to read and follow along with it. You also used some good imagery. I cannot see very much wrong with it, apart from the fact that maybe you should put 'to enfold' at the end of line 4 instead of on a separate line because it doesn't go along with the list that follows. But overall, excellent job

Thanks for your comment.  A tip for future critiques:  instead of generic terms like "flow" and "imagery", perhaps you could point out specific examples in the poem.  What images stood out for you and why?  ("Flow" is not a poetry term at all.  It's best not to use it, but instead to find out about meter -- you could start in the Poetry Practice forum)/ Admin