10-21-2015, 03:11 PM
Reading this, I definitely experienced the same heartache as the speaker in the poem!
My favorite stanza is this one here:
"It makes the fall leaves fall harder.
Like the world collapses-
Or at least a world collapses-
As each one tumbles down."
I like how it gives the audience something to compare that feeling total collapse to--- like, giving your audience scale. Even though the whole world isn't really collapsing, and the speaker knows that, the speaker's personal world collapses... That is genius imagery! You did a great job of putting a mental image for that experience of desolation in my head.
My favorite stanza is this one here:
"It makes the fall leaves fall harder.
Like the world collapses-
Or at least a world collapses-
As each one tumbles down."
I like how it gives the audience something to compare that feeling total collapse to--- like, giving your audience scale. Even though the whole world isn't really collapsing, and the speaker knows that, the speaker's personal world collapses... That is genius imagery! You did a great job of putting a mental image for that experience of desolation in my head.