10-13-2015, 10:53 PM
(10-13-2015, 03:09 PM)just mercedes Wrote:Walking along the road by my house one early evening, several very large oak trees, at the same time and to my amazement, were radomly but steadily dropping acorns to the ground. They sprinkled down all around the trees, some on the earth, some on the road, one on top of my head :-) It reminded me of how water radomly drops off leaves after the rain has stopped.(10-11-2015, 04:00 PM)justlikeyou Wrote: walking at duskI'm having trouble with active acorns. I don't think you need the word 'road' there.
acorns sprinkle
the blacktop road
(10-11-2015, 04:00 PM)justlikeyou Wrote: walking at duskHi - nice snapshot, but I'm having trouble with active acorns. The way this is written, the acorns could be walking at dusk, sprinkling the blacktop with something.
acorns sprinkle
the blacktop road
Does this help?
walking at dusk-
acorns sprinkle
the blacktop road
