Spectrophotometry, return edit

[Keith]

SPECTROPHOTOMETRY

Only a matter of time...

A column of light
broken by streaks of blackness I read this as how the instrument operates and as such I am interested as to were this is going
well-measured, is this relevant ?
each interrupting
band a disappointment, odd line break surely after band ?
a disease,
a death in the family ok so you are comparing the way it works to lifes ups and downs
--traces of lead, silver, cinnabar--
with the whole being
just a perfect circle's arc I assume this is the output display
pressed and stretched
into this pillar what pillar we cant see this ?
for the viewer's convenience.

Not even
the subtlest implication
of the circle must exist--
light is a line, not a wheel,
and the dutiful scholar
asks no questions. Sorry I dont understand were this has gone
Today must become yesterday, as
tomorrow becomes today,
and the dates on the calendar transform
into memories, stories
warped for the message, what message
marks on the line graph. The graph signifies the passage of time ?
So our tests on experience
yield no statistically relevant results.
Try again, put the past behind you move on ?
if you can.

This analogy is quite hard to pull off and your comparisons have been over shadowed by the descriptions of the machine my suggestion would be to have a good think about what message you want the reader to take away from your poem and make sure this is the strongest of the themes, cut back any info that is surplus or unfounded if you make a reference to something then make sure the reader also has a point of reference. If this was too much for mild I apologize but I know how frustrating it can be to have the poem in your head making perfect sense without it making it to the page. Best Keith