1:43

[billy]

1:43,
it's always 1:43. not sure these 2 lines do much as the title suggests the same point....[something happened then]

Time has stopped moving,
it's left only you. 
Circling me, up to here reads pretty ok, the next two lines do emphasise but could be stronger, perhaps if you turn circling me into a simile
consuming me,
abusing me.

Put your chest against my back,
the way you used to. 
I want to slow our hearts to the same speed.
Only for a minute,
it's all the time I need, no need really for [the time] in truth i don't think it adds much to the poem
so I can remember the synchronized beating. a suggest would be beats for beating

Scream in my face, is this person dead? literally as well as figuratively? if so it works, it's as if you're trying to raise a response from them
so I know you feel something.
Shake me if I'm day dreaming, is day needed? it feels a little weak
I may just be numb. 

Love me,
lose me,
hate me, i've seen these lines elsewhere. flesh them out into something with more depth
and remind me again which one of us won. this lets me know its was a traumatic parting.


Looking forward to getting some constructive feedback, especially around punctuation and flow.