The Prophet
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(08-14-2015, 09:20 AM)Leanne Wrote:  Many thanks Todd.  I didn't notice the incongruity with "beware" but now you've pointed it out, it's unacceptable.  I do want "idols" just for the reality tv aspect, and simply dropping "beware" doesn't cut it, so I'm going to have to think about how to weave that back in (or perhaps leave it out altogether as it might be too heavy-handed anyway).  Maybe something about "you are burning your idols"?  

The fallen stars were shifting Greece to Rome, Castor and Pollux, then on to Romulus and Remus.  If you haven't picked it up, then it's not clear enough so I'm going to have to really re-think that segue.  I wish I could get away with not naming the hydra, but since others have had difficulty figuring out the allusion even with open statement, I think it's just going to have to stay overt.  

Thank you again.  Much thinking for me.
I probably should have picked up the falling stars. An idea for the roman shift though if that doesn't convince you is slide Juno into there some place as some celebrity makeover and reuse Hera again. Then lead to the falling stars and it probably sets it fine.

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The Prophet - by Leanne - 07-30-2015, 05:16 AM
RE: The Prophet - by tectak - 07-30-2015, 08:06 AM
RE: The Prophet - by Brownlie - 07-30-2015, 08:29 AM
RE: The Prophet - by Leanne - 07-30-2015, 11:10 AM
RE: The Prophet - by NobodyNothing - 07-30-2015, 11:45 AM
RE: The Prophet - by Leanne - 07-30-2015, 11:59 AM
RE: The Prophet - by NobodyNothing - 07-30-2015, 12:05 PM
RE: The Prophet - by NobodyNothing - 08-01-2015, 10:50 AM
RE: The Prophet - by Magpie - 07-30-2015, 03:21 PM
RE: The Prophet - by Leanne - 07-30-2015, 03:57 PM
RE: The Prophet - by tectak - 07-31-2015, 02:53 AM
RE: The Prophet - by Leanne - 08-01-2015, 01:21 PM
RE: The Prophet - by NobodyNothing - 08-01-2015, 01:29 PM
RE: The Prophet - by cjchaffin - 08-03-2015, 02:59 AM
RE: The Prophet - by Turtle - 08-03-2015, 05:02 AM
RE: The Prophet - by Leanne - 08-03-2015, 05:18 AM
RE: The Prophet - by Turtle - 08-03-2015, 07:57 AM
RE: The Prophet - by Leanne - 08-03-2015, 05:21 AM
RE: The Prophet - by cjchaffin - 08-03-2015, 05:27 AM
RE: The Prophet - by Quixilated - 08-03-2015, 08:51 AM
RE: The Prophet - by Grace - 08-04-2015, 09:26 AM
RE: The Prophet - by Leanne - 08-08-2015, 05:32 AM
RE: The Prophet - by rayheinrich - 08-09-2015, 08:56 AM
RE: The Prophet - by Leanne - 08-09-2015, 09:32 AM
RE: The Prophet - by rayheinrich - 08-09-2015, 03:24 PM
RE: The Prophet - by Leanne - 08-09-2015, 04:45 PM
RE: The Prophet - by rayheinrich - 08-10-2015, 03:26 PM
RE: The Prophet - by Todd - 08-14-2015, 06:23 AM
RE: The Prophet - by Leanne - 08-14-2015, 09:20 AM
RE: The Prophet - by Todd - 08-14-2015, 01:15 PM
RE: The Prophet - by Magpie - 08-14-2015, 10:47 AM



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