08-14-2015, 09:20 AM
Many thanks Todd. I didn't notice the incongruity with "beware" but now you've pointed it out, it's unacceptable. I do want "idols" just for the reality tv aspect, and simply dropping "beware" doesn't cut it, so I'm going to have to think about how to weave that back in (or perhaps leave it out altogether as it might be too heavy-handed anyway). Maybe something about "you are burning your idols"?
The fallen stars were shifting Greece to Rome, Castor and Pollux, then on to Romulus and Remus. If you haven't picked it up, then it's not clear enough so I'm going to have to really re-think that segue. I wish I could get away with not naming the hydra, but since others have had difficulty figuring out the allusion even with open statement, I think it's just going to have to stay overt.
Thank you again. Much thinking for me.
The fallen stars were shifting Greece to Rome, Castor and Pollux, then on to Romulus and Remus. If you haven't picked it up, then it's not clear enough so I'm going to have to really re-think that segue. I wish I could get away with not naming the hydra, but since others have had difficulty figuring out the allusion even with open statement, I think it's just going to have to stay overt.
Thank you again. Much thinking for me.
It could be worse